My Edit Writing

WALT - Edit writing

I am going to explain to you 4 special places I go to in my community.

The first special place that I am going to write is about school. School is good for children under the age of 5-13 year old's. School is special to me because you get educated by wonderful teachers who help you to learn many things about subjects. Such as reading, writing, science and maths. In school maths is my favourite subject. I love to add, subtract, multiply and divide.

This paragraph is my second special place and it is church. Every Sunday I go church with my family and learn the stories about god. When it is nearly the end of the year. we celebrate by having our youth perform dances and music. We often go church service on Wednesdays and have choirs. Church is special to me because it is the one thing that is always important to me and my family.  

Another special place to me is my home. Whenever i go somewhere far from home. I always feel I bit sad. Everyday I do chores and help clean the whole house. I sometimes cook breakfast for my siblings and help out my dad with the shopping. It is special to me because I am always with my family everywhere we go.

My last and best special place in my community is going to the  beach with my family. The beach that I go to is Tahuna Toreo. Not very often I go there to feed the ducks and lay down on the sand. This is one of my favourite special places in my community. I love to go to beaches and hang around with friends and family.

I have now explained 4 places that are special to me. One of my favourites is Tahuna Toreo. Some people have their own special places in the community. But this is my favourite one.     
Special Place:

One of the special places in the world is my home. My home is a special place because my family are there for me to keep me safe. I will be explaining 3 reasons why home is a special place to me.

As for some people say “home sweet home”. I love my home so much that every time I go somewhere far. I will always say “I miss home”. In my lovely house I live with my parents, my 2 siblings (Amelia & William) and also my grandpa. I have my first reason why home is a special place to me. It is because I get to do chores such as washing the dishes, cleaning our bedrooms, vacuuming, cleaning the shoes etc.

My second reason is that lots of my family members from my mum’s side and my dad’s side often comes and visits us when we are at home. We then have a break and chitchat for a little until we feel our stomachs rumbling. So we head to the kitchen and snack on some toast and biscuits and as for our beverage we drink Milo or Tea or just plain water or juice. For dinner my dad drives himself with his car to buy 2 buckets from KFC so that we can munch on YUMMY!!!! I have a lot of people in my family who are all around the world. Part of my extended family lives in Australia, here in Auckland, New Zealand and also in Tonga.

The third reason why my home is special because it is warm and cozy to snuggle in. In my house the are 3 bedrooms. 1 bedroom for my grandpa, 1 for my parents and my youngest brother and 1 bedroom for me and my sister. Each bedroom is so comfy and restful that I always wake up late in the morning for school.

This has now come to an end of explaining why my home is a special place in the community. I have explained 3 reasons why and also my introduction and conclusion.

This is my edited writing that I have written for my writing test from the past few weeks. I this explanation writing I have written about what place is special to me. The special place that is special to me is my home. I love my home really and I like when my family cherishes the memories we have had in our lovely home. I might have explained in my previous writing all the special places that is special to me but instead I chose my home to be my special place. It says in my previous writing that Tahuna Toreo is a special place in my community but since I have been editing. I have now found out what my true special place is.

Food Tech Blogging: Meat Pies

Today in Food Tech we have finally made our Meat Pies and also added our fillings. Myself, Inez and Kura have been making our pies and also filling them with the meat pie filling we did last week. We were instructed by our food tech teacher to roll out our pastry and put it together with the meat pies. To finish it off we put some cheese to taste. We were also instructed to take images of our hard work.

Learning Evidence

WALT -  Summarise information in a text
SUCCESS CRITERIA:  I will know I can do this when I find key words/information and make notes


 

This is my presentation about 2 texts. they are called The Great Barrier and The Class Newspaper. My reading group Matai has been learning about summarising information in a text. We had to answer the following questions our literacy teacher has given us. Then we post it to our blog.  

Ordering Whole Number and Decimals

WALT - Order Whole Numbers and Decimals



This is my finished maths presentation for week 8, which is called Ordering Whole Numbers and Decimals.
 This is what my maths group did (Tapaono) and we had to answer the following questions that our maths teacher has put up for us. Then when we have completed the follow up task. We then post it to our blog.

Food Tech Blogging: Making filling for meat pies

Today in food tech we have been making fillings for meat pies. We will be making our pastry pies next Tuesday, so we just made the fillings for next week. My buddies were Inez and Kura. Our food tech teacher was Miss Heka and she ordered us to take pictures of our cooking and to post it to our blog.

 

My Role Models

My Role Model:

My two role models are my parents.

Mum: My mum has had me in her tummy in 2004. She carried me wherever she went and cared for me her whole life. When I grow up I would really love to be just like my mum. She is a wonderful mum to my family and I will like to be a mum just like mine.

Dad: He also cared for me since I was a newborn. He also cared for me when I was a little kid. He cared for me and my family also helping us throughout our struggles. I would also like to be like him because he is brave and strong.

These are reasons why I pick my parents and that they will lead me and my siblings to a better future and to make them proud.

Simple and Compound Sentences

WALT - Identify & write simple and compound sentences



This presentation is about simple and compound sentences. A sentence is a group of words that form a complete thought. It must contain a subject (Person, Place, Thing or Idea) and a verb (The thing that the subject is doing. I had to highlight the subject and the verb on a simple sentence. Also I had to highlight a conjunction word in an compound sentence.

Whale Child & The Serious Game

WALT: Identify the similarities and differences across different texts
SUCCESS CRITERIA:  I will know I can do this when I can explain the similarities and differences between two texts




This is my presentation about 2 texts. They are called The Serious Game & The Whale Child. We had to answer the following questions that our literacy teacher wrote and post it to our blog.
My literacy's group learning intention is Identifying the similarities and differences across different texts.
Success Criteria: I will know I can do this when I can explain the similarities and differences between 2 texts.  

THE DIGI POI WAS A HIT

Have you ever been to Polyfest before. Well this has been my first time going. This will be the day the I will remember.

Polyfest has traditional performances, music and some dances. Each stage performs their own moves and also gets placed as 1st, 2nd and 3rd. When I go to college I think I might be participating in Polyfest.

My favourite highlight of the day was doing the Digi Poi which was so much fun and also it was on the ASB Polyfest Gallery. It was a hit doing the Digi Poi. I had a few friends doing it with me also and I had so much fun.

My group and I were walking around the place looking for free stuff. We also got some goodie bags from ASB. Inside was some sun glasses, poster, fan and more cool stuff inside. We kept on looking and looking and we got a lot of free stuff from the staff of Polyfest.

At the end of the day we were so hot and sweaty, we couldn’t even breathe properly. When I participate in Polyfest. I can not wait to do all those cool stuff again.

Link to the Digi Poi video

Wonderful Water

WALT -  Compare and contrast ideas from one text to another SUCCESS CRITERIA:  I will know I can do this when I can explain the similarities and differences between two texts

This is my presentation about the text we are reading called Wonderful Water. We had to answer the following questions our literacy teacher has made and post it to our blog. This text is about a group of students searching around streams and test the water if it was clean or not.

Water Worries WEEK 5 Activity

WALT -  Support all my answers with evidence from the text
Success Criteria:  I will know I can do this when I can use information from the text to back up my answers



This is my presentation about water worries. I haven't post this the right time but now I have completed it. We had to answer the following questions that out teacher has given us on this presentations and post it on our blog.

Myth & Legends: Te Taiao o Tamaki

WALT:  research the various myths and legends that were used to explain features of our environment.    Features such as our land, our oceans our natural resources.



This presentation is about myths and legends about Maui and Aoraki. They share stories about there legend and their environment. It is also linked to Te Taiao o Tamaki.

My Visual Mihi

This is my visual mihi that I have created using HyperStudio. The first thing that 

I have drawn was my tongan coat and arms which represents my culture. Second is a cross which means that I love Jesus Christ and that I go church. Third is the most important which is my family. and last but not least is listening to music in my spare time.