Walt: write a interesting and detailed recount
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In the past few weeks we have been going to our Trade and Enterprise groups. Making orders and selling products. Our year 5 and 6 block had their market day on Friday. So many visitors came over to our space and bought products what students had made. Visitors had come from christchurch to see and buy our products.
We had lots of groups that students attended to make their products. The reason why we are having market day it’s so that we can raise money in our bank accounts. This market day is about raising money for students in their bank accounts and selling their products. The groups students had attended are custom stationery, Kitchen, Home ware, Jewels and Accessories, Musical Instruments and also toys.
Teachers was setting up during morning tea. We had to move chairs, desks and tables. Chairs, desks and tables were moved everywhere. It was moved outside the porch, inside the classrooms and furniture lying around.
Lots of people and kids were buying and selling products. In each groups they have been making candles, soaps, drums, flutes, squishy balls, chocolate fudge, hot chips, slime and final last loom bands. Not that much people had byed products they just byed what the like and wanted. The products people sold was heaps of products they had sold.
So my group is homeware and we sell our products by packaging them. We were splitted into little groups and our product was making candles. We pack our candles by putting it into a jar and selling them to customers. My group and I didn't wrap the candles so we just put them into a jar so that you can light the candle inside.
My experience about market day is when I sell products to customers talking to them and how customers like to buy our products. My feelings about market day is when I was so excited to sell my group's products to customers and that they give money to us.
Recount Writing
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Write for my reader
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I've tried to think about my reader
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My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.
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My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.
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My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
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Purpose
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I tried to meet the purpose
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My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose
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The message is clear in some parts of the recount.
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My text fully meets the purpose.
The message is clear all through the recount.
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Introduction
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My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.
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My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.
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My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.
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My introduction wows my reader!
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Paragraph Topics
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My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.
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I have tried to follow my plan.
Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.
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My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea.
I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.
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My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.
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Task of description:
Our task was to write a interesting and detailed recount. I had confidence in me so that I can write this whole recount. Lots of visitors from Christchurch came over to by some products at our market day. I liked market day it was really fun
